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Alicia's avatar

Oh my gosh, this is so good!!! It had humor, pathos, fear, mystery, supernatural tension. It's like a really good "Twilight Zone" episode. So impressive.

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Thank you so much. Wow. A Twilight Zone comparison. If I wasn’t lying down already I’d have to lie down after that one.

Alicia's avatar

Rod Serling would be proud of you!

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Imagine if you will….

I like it!

Kate's avatar

Ooh, I love the uncanny factor! Kind of reminds me of Brian Evenson.

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Nice! Thank you so much!

Kayla Michelle Miller's avatar

You have a way with taking me by surprise each and every time! Which is crazy because I'm aware now that things are never as they seem lol. So so freaking good!

I also agree with another comment about your stories having such a "Twilight Zone" feel to them. I've probably said this before, the show is one of my favorites haha.

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If I’m giving twilight some vibes that’s a massive compliment. Thank you!

Paper Cut Pages's avatar

This is great!

Gregory Blair's avatar

Wow! This is great! Full of unexpected twists! Bravo!

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Thank you for reading. I’m so glad you liked it!

HVR - James's avatar

Wait. What? He fell? Not her? Dead?

Words about things and stuff's avatar

I left it open on purpose. What do you think happened?

HVR - James's avatar

I thought he fell, not her. Then she ran back, but he was somehow with her?

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Two realities at once. Totally whack-a-do!

Rachel Nasatka's avatar

Where do you even come up with this shit 👏👏👏

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Oh and thank you for reading!

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Part of this one had actually been brewing in my mind for about a week. That’s when whatever happened to my eye happened. Eyelid got all puffy and messed with my vision. For a short while I did sort of see…. I don’t know… trails of people moving around… like following after them. That got me thinking “what if?”

Rebekah Mallory's avatar

Oh, Stephen 😢

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Thanks. Or not thanks. I mean it is pretty sad.

Rebekah Mallory's avatar

And wonderfully written!

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Aww thanks! You're the best!

Aaliya's avatar

This was brilliant !! Wow

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Thank you! I’m so glad you liked it!

From Tender Ground's avatar

Wow … this was so good… I was in the edge the whole time 🧡

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Oh wow. Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it

Olly von's avatar

This is so incredibly cool I would read an entire novel based on this is he a ghost did his sister possess him!? It could go so many ways I will admit that at the very beginning when he was talking about how stupid dares were i thought i was reading a story from your goat 😂

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That is something Falcing the goat would think.

Thank you for reading. I thought it was fun with this one to leave it open enough for whoever reads it to make up their in minds on some things.