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Aaliya's avatar

What an eerie and captivating tale!!

What an eerie and captivating tale! The way Julia’s harmless little phrase, “it’s settled then,” transforms from a tool of social control into a desperate plea in the midst of supernatural terror is chilling. The build-up from an ordinary afternoon tea to a storm of bargains and forfeit is so well paced, and the ending with the yellow butterfly is both haunting and poetic.

Great piece of writing ♥️♥️

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Wow! thank you so much. I love that you saw all of that in the story. It was a fun piece to write, a bit outside of what I usually do, but with a reaction like yours, very well worth the effort.

Aaliya's avatar

Enjoyed it truly

Inga Jones Writes Thrillers's avatar

Lovely story. Great setting and I like that you don't over explain the mom's history. It's implied through action.

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Thank you! Seemed a bit much to get into all that. Knowing that SOMETHING happened was enough I thought.

Inga Jones Writes Thrillers's avatar

Absolutely. I think it's a sign of a mature writer, leaving things for the readers to interpret.

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Thank you. I used to fell compelled to over explain everything. It took a while to see what a mistake that was.

Rachel Nasatka's avatar

I’m speechless SPEECHLESS. Pure shivers. Never saw it coming.

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Wow! Thank you. That’s, like, the best compliment ever!

April Miles's avatar

Oh this is GOOD

Mousy's avatar

SCREAM!!! AH 😫😭🦋

Words about things and stuff's avatar

I… ummm… I hope that’s a good reaction?

Mousy's avatar

NOT IF YOU'RE JULIA 😭😭 but yes an excellent story :3

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Yeah. I guess maybe not for her. One of these days maybe i’ll figure out how to write a happy ending. 🤔

Mousy's avatar

Nah :3 do whatever you want!!

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Words about things and stuff's avatar

Thank you. It’s not my usual kind of subject matter so it’s nice to think I did okay with it.